I did not receive any feedback on my
first elevator pitch. So I did my own critique on it and found a need
for improvement. I need to be more relaxed and confident. No one is
going to believe me if I don;t believe it myself.
I have also modified my pitch to make
it more relevant to the person that I am pitching it to. And, since
this is supposed to happen on an elevator, there might not be much
time for the pitch. So, mine has been revised to make it short,
sweet, and to the point.
Hope it works.
I like the name of your company, "Time Track." This service initially appealed to me because I also miss appointments sometimes and would love to have reminders on my phone. How is this service different than the calendar function on a cell phone where you can enter the appointment and get a reminder for it? You did seem very relaxed. Your pitch didn't seem rehearsed and you did a great job of communicating your idea in a short amount of time. Good luck! You can check out my pitch here: http://isabellaruggeri.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html.
ReplyDeleteHi, I really liked your idea and how you presented it. It was concise and to the point. I feel like I have a good idea of the service that you'll provide, and who it will be provided to. One thing I would suggest for the future is to try and find an area of your home with a simpler background. The background of this video was somewhat distracting throughout, and I feel like a plain wall would help me focus on you better. Check out my elevator pitch here: http://jrozent3003.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
ReplyDeleteHi, I love the idea of your company. Time Track is also a great name and is connected back to the idea. Would this be available on all devices such as android and apple? I would love to have this on my phone because often times I forget about appointments. How would you generate income off of this product? Please let me know as I am very interested. I would love if you took the time to check out my page as well. I have an idea for a service that connects college students to short term jobs in their area. You can check it out here and please leave feedback: http://danielricciulli.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
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